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Chelsee's New Diet
"Phew, I am spent!" came a familiar voice, following the sound of the door bursting open.
Meagan looked up from her schoolwork to see Chelsee walking in through the front door, carrying a load of stuffher handbag, as well as what looked like a dozen brightly-coloured shopping bags. Leaving the door open behind her, she dropped the numerous paper bags onto the floor.
Chelsee stood there in the doorway for a few moments, catching her breath. It was a hot day outside with the summer having very much arrived. The golden rays of the sun poured in through the open front door, causing the beads of sweat that had collected on Chelsee's soft,
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Fattened Faculty (Chapter 13)
Bare feet on the cold, tile floor of a high school locker room—now that was a nostalgic sensation. The memories associated with the feeling may have been largely negative, but the whole situation held a warm familiarity nonetheless. Last time Vicki had set foot on a floor like this, it had been as an embarrassingly fat high-school student forced to take her clothes off in front of skinnier, prettier peers. Since then, a lot had changed, but the tiles were still cold, and she was still embarrassingly overweight.
Heather finally broke the silence, shouting at her friends so that they could hear each other over the walls of their
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Reunion with Kaylee
Saw Kaylee today. She's back from Wyoming finally, it's been like five months since the last time I saw her.
Those five months treated her. . . well.
She's been working up there on a ranch as a cook, and from what she's said to me on the phone, she was in charge of desserts.
Looks like she's been sampling her own cooking, kind of a lot.
Which is good news of course. Any girl enjoying more food than necessary is a good thing in my opinon. And the better they carry their weight, the better a thing it is, and Kaylee. . . she carries her weight well. Very. Very. Well.
We met up at the football game. It was Homecoming, lots of frou-frou, fa
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Rated Moderately Mature for some nudity.
I hope you're still with me at the end of this part, as it's been the trickiest to write so far. When collating the material for it, I realised it fell far short of where it needed to be. So I introduced the character of Dr. Claire Belmont as something of a counterpoint to Jane’s personality, and to help Lalia conquer her fat girl demons. If Lalia isn't bubbly and confident, she might as well not be Lalia at all, so this chapter focuses on getting her mojo back. The beach shop scene is a particular case in point of how I wanted to do this without having to put Lalia through another stuffing. Dr. Claire and the beach shop owner act as surrogates for Lalia's more familiar personality traits before they re-emerges in herself. Appropriately enough, this was the part in the story where I found my own confidence in writing Lalia as a sexy, confident BBW.
Here Lalia undergoes something of a transformation here in terms of her character arc, meaning that even though she finds time to go up another couple of dress sizes, any weight increase is fairly unspectacular and more about consolidating her gain from the stuffing that ended Part 2. This metamorphosis is reflected in the language, as her largeness is initially described in relatively negative terms, which gradually shift positively as the chapter progresses. Apologies if the opening scene seems a little brief for anyone’s taste; I just didn’t want to spend pages and pages laboriously describing Lalia's post-binge shrinking and I also didn’t just want another stuffing episode when there was so much of that in Part 2.
My personal opinion on this part is a bit divided due to there being a lot of descriptive material going on here. There's not a lot of Lalia's trademark snappy dialogue which I enjoy both reading and writing so much, and I'm not 100% happy with the pacing. For those reasons I think at times the story bogs down somewhat. Then again, I think that groundwork is absolutely necessary and the effect all of those descriptions provide is important to have there. So I'd like to hear your opinions on this part; are you a fan of all the imagery of Lalia's fatness? Or do you miss that being referred to via dialogue? In short, I'm extra-interested in your opinions of Part 3.
Comments are as always welcome, no matter how long after the deviation is published; don't feel discouraged from commenting just because the story has been 'out' for however long. Feel free to ask me questions and offer criticisms about my writing and I will respond.
Rated Moderately Mature for some nudity.
I hope you're still with me at the end of this part, as it's been the trickiest to write so far. When collating the material for it, I realised it fell far short of where it needed to be. So I introduced the character of Dr. Claire Belmont as something of a counterpoint to Jane’s personality, and to help Lalia conquer her fat girl demons. If Lalia isn't bubbly and confident, she might as well not be Lalia at all, so this chapter focuses on getting her mojo back. The beach shop scene is a particular case in point of how I wanted to do this without having to put Lalia through another stuffing. Dr. Claire and the beach shop owner act as surrogates for Lalia's more familiar personality traits before they re-emerges in herself. Appropriately enough, this was the part in the story where I found my own confidence in writing Lalia as a sexy, confident BBW.
Here Lalia undergoes something of a transformation here in terms of her character arc, meaning that even though she finds time to go up another couple of dress sizes, any weight increase is fairly unspectacular and more about consolidating her gain from the stuffing that ended Part 2. This metamorphosis is reflected in the language, as her largeness is initially described in relatively negative terms, which gradually shift positively as the chapter progresses. Apologies if the opening scene seems a little brief for anyone’s taste; I just didn’t want to spend pages and pages laboriously describing Lalia's post-binge shrinking and I also didn’t just want another stuffing episode when there was so much of that in Part 2.
My personal opinion on this part is a bit divided due to there being a lot of descriptive material going on here. There's not a lot of Lalia's trademark snappy dialogue which I enjoy both reading and writing so much, and I'm not 100% happy with the pacing. For those reasons I think at times the story bogs down somewhat. Then again, I think that groundwork is absolutely necessary and the effect all of those descriptions provide is important to have there. So I'd like to hear your opinions on this part; are you a fan of all the imagery of Lalia's fatness? Or do you miss that being referred to via dialogue? In short, I'm extra-interested in your opinions of Part 3.
Comments are as always welcome, no matter how long after the deviation is published; don't feel discouraged from commenting just because the story has been 'out' for however long. Feel free to ask me questions and offer criticisms about my writing and I will respond.
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good to see any story involving Lalia